Wishing Well
Saturday night begat Sunday fire,
the morning bloodroses in the clouds
each one the chariot of an angry pagan god
chased out by one true passion.
This sunrise is only a decoration
unlike the one before
which may have meant life or death
--we've all woke up dead
in time for the fire to burn
it's mark of one more day alive.
this one sunrise is for your eyes only,
enchanted and drunken as they are
by love's
shot glass whiskey barfloor dance.
The sun sets us to burn.
The floors are on fire--
we are drunken well-wishers
casting pennies into darkness
you threw them for luck--
I threw them
for one endless weekend
Sundayrise tells us to try again
very soon
Written By Eric Bachman
BARB
Bardouble29 (aka Barb) has always loved to write. Writing has proven to be a way to deal with the tough parts of life. Her poetry tends to be a little on the dark and sad side. She loves making words come alive. But she can be known to throw in poems of other venue.
5 comments:
I like this. Once again with the extreme visuals! I just keep picturing a landscape awash in golden fiery red orange glow.
"The floors are on fire--
we are drunken well-wishers
casting pennies into darkness"
love the visual imagery of this one ... and the way you've juxtaposed the notion of the wishing well with fiery imagery.
i can see those clouds ... "bloodroses ..." love that!
Wow its almost like a beautiful story expressed in poetic flow. The various personification that u have used for sunrise is beautiful.
Wow, Eric--what a metaphor! Is it me or does your poetry just get richer per output!
Everyone~
Thank you for reading this one. It does mean a lot. The metaphor was born of simplicity--I was just going to wish Barb well for the night, and in writing the first sentence I noticed it was coming out as a poem and the metaphor would be perfect (accidents and serendipity produce the best metaphors), so I went with it. Creation is a very spontaneous thing like that, at least for me it is.
Thank you all for your reading of this one. You are great, and it's nice to kick back and read as you all are flowering into a poetic renaissance, as well.
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